jueves, 7 de abril de 2011

She is living home.

It is the story of a girl who is only 18 years old. She decides to leave home because her parents did not understand her. . She woke up early, when her parents were still snoring and wrote a farewell note, she took the little money she had saved and packed her suitcase and went thoughtlessly. Upon leaving, she stared at her house and began to remember everything about when she lived there with her parents, She took a handkerchiefand began to cry . devastated, she broke down and clutching the handkerchief very strongly, she turned and went . She, had to struggle to find a job in the trade, but her request was denied, . After two years, her parents realized that she had grown up without their help. The girl was lying in her new apartment,when she received a call from her parents, and picked up hier clothes and returned with them.

1 comentario:

  1. Good composition Laia but
    1)you made many errors with the pronouns, their, his ,her.
    2) You don't use punctuation correctly. When you finish a sentence you should use a full stop and start the next sentence with a capital letter.
    Please check next time

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